Molly and I have discussed our feedback and have made some alterations to our rough cut to improve our overall film opening. We started by looking at the written answers from out target audience;
1. Do we need to add a voiceover to our film opening? 'I don't think a voiceover is needed as the music creates a good opening sequence.' 'Voiceover would be nice as it shows what she's thinking.' 'Voiceover would make it seem more like an opening - combined with more inter-titles.' 'Voiceover not needed.' 'Voiceover would be good to show the characters point of view.' 'Don't think it needs a voiceover, the music fits in well.' 'Include a voiceover in parts of the film opening but not all the way through to explain the feelings in the story.' 50% of the people we asked said we needed to include a voiceover to break up the soundtrack and explain the events to make it clearer. So we wrote a script and recorded Amelia (our lead actress) reading it. It's only a short voiceover which appears at key moments in the opening to make the audience understand Amelia's character's emotions. However we have decided to produce two versions of our film opening, one with a voiceover and one without and then choose our favourite as the final version. A few people have also said we need to include more inter-titles to make it seem more like a film opening, so we analysed the opening sequence and found one more space in the scrapbook where a credit could occur. This has enhanced the continuity of the credits and made them much less disjointed and more flowing.
2. Is our Production company name; Messy Productions, appropriate for our film? 'The Ident is really good - it fits in with the genre.' 'The Ident is fine, don't need to change it.' 'I like the typography used - very effective.' 'I like the name - it's creative and imaginative.' Molly and I have decided to keep the Production company name, Messy Productions, as about 75% of the people we asked said they liked it. We also think it represents our genre well, as it evokes an arty, creative mood which links in with the central prop of the scrapbook. The name also adds a personal touch to our film opening as it's a combination of both mine and Molly's first names: Molly + Jessie = Messy!
3. Is our film opening too long? If so which scenes do you think we should cut? 'It did drag on a bit, maybe cut out the 'swing in the park' scene as it's the most forgettable scene.' 'Cut out the unneeded shots when the characters are entering the cafe.' 'Try to shorten some of the clips to quicken the pace.' 'The scene on the swings could be cut, as it's my least favourite.' 'Get rid of the opening of the cafe door, but keep them sat in the cafe.' 'If you have to cut one scene, then either cut the 'swing' scene or 'bedroom' scene.' Molly and I have completely cut out the 'swing in the park' scene as we felt it wasn't relevant to the story and didn't add anything important - plus it was only a short shot anyway. This was one of the scenes that the feedback highlighted we should cut. However the other scene they suggested was the 'bed' scene, we have not cut this scene as we felt it fits well with the music and reinforces the romantic genre. We have also shortened the 'cafe' scene to make it smoother and to quicken the pace, as the 'entering the cafe' shots were not needed, this makes the 'cafe' scene more flowing.
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